comments - Voodoo

Voodoo

http://www.grometsplaza.net/boundstories/storiessz/voodoo.html

I am going to comment on part 1, which I have just read, before looking at part 2.

Normally I would not have looked at this story, because I tend to avoid NC stories. I decided to have a look partly because the author has recently appeared on the forum, but also because the sequel has just been posted, and it has more interesting / acceptable story codes.

There are two main characters, a woman who verges on the evil, and an initially very shy man. I will not give away the plot for now, so just go and read the story.

The woman's actions, and demands that she only wants a "strong man who takes what he wants" are interesting, make a degree of sense, and also do nothing what so ever to help me warm to her as a person. She comes across as cold, heartless, and deserving to be taught a lesson.

This makes the NC aspects of the story much more acceptable, since you can see that the man's actions towards her are somehow reasonable. I would not say justified, but they are understandable.

One logic point, he does not seem to have made any effort to test, or to do a dry run of his new purchase. I would have expected something like that, before leaping into his plan, given the risks associated with his actions.

Overall a short, well written story with well formed characters with solid motivations for their actions.

Voodoo - part 3

http://www.grometsplaza.net/boundstories/storiessz/voodoo3.html

This is another fairly short, but very well told part of this story.  The main point of interest for me is that it is told from Jenny's point of view, so we finally get some solid insight into her point of view, into how she sees the experiences she has been through.

It is interesting to see her changing views on all of this, while at the same time the core of her personality - "balls of steel" to put it politely - continues to shine through.

I don't want to spoil the events here, so go and read the story to see how they unfold.  One point that really stands out for me is the way Bill reacts when he finds her.  It seems that all Jenny is thinking about is her sexual need, Bill seems far more concerned with and focused on her safety and the practical points at work.

It is a fascinating contrast, especially when you consider the sight that Bill is confronted with when he meets Jenny.

Something else that I really like here is the growing sense of confidence and power in the way Bill approaches and handles Jenny, the very power, in an unexpected manor, that Jenny said in part one that she expects and demands in any partner.

Just go and read this, starting with part 1, it is a lot of fun

It did   She is no longer the great mystery to me.  This third part really helps the whole story, at least for me

To be honest, I hadn't planned on writing the third part.  But feline did raise some questions about Jenny I figured needed answered.  Besides, I write as the ideas hit me.  So I really can't say one way or another if there'll be a part 4.